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Conditional sushi by *NikiP:iconNikiP:



Conditional that fish!
If it                          what if?
                  good
Then sniff it
                  good
Would it and could it

Probe that star
Invade it leave it
Leave it less
than whole

Ask it!                       What if?
                   good
Own its steadfast identity
If it!
Then sniff it
Make sure it’s fresh.
©2009 *NikiP
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Author's Comments

This is a combination of themes that warrants more discussion.

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:iconaraphete-rising:
Hmm. I suppose it does warrant more discussion, if only for the fact that I'd like to know exactly what themes you hoped to incorporate here. It's scattered, with the repetition of "good" and the questions the subject seems to be asking and answering for himself creating sharp projections into the reader's focus. Unifying and baffling at the same time. I don't know if this comment makes any sense. Let me know if it spins your brain, because you've certainly spun mine with this piece. In any case, it's been a while. How are you? :)

--
What is our purpose? Why are we here?
These questions have been asked throughout time,
And as of yet, no one has the answer.
Why?
Because WE ARE THE ANSWER.
:iconnikip:
Now what type of writer wouldI be if i gave away my themes so cheaply. ;)

I do however like your reading that the 'subject' is answering his own questions rather than being two subjects in discourse. It certainly has a sharp dynamic, but perhaps we could talk at length if you could tell me what you think is being discussed?

Also I'm ok swamped with work, but writing again which is nice. How are you old friend?

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:iconaraphete-rising:
Hmm. I'm actually afraid to tell you what I think is being discussed..I know he's questioning his role in this world, whether to pick a new(conforming) mask for himself or go with what he knows to be right: his own will. I'll stop here, and read it again before I speculate any more (I'm in my Message Box, and that doesn't make for great speculation--how can I speculate on what I can't see?)

I'm doing fine as well. Just getting ready for exams. In four days, I'll be on summer break, (and hopefully writing again too).

--
What is our purpose? Why are we here?
These questions have been asked throughout time,
And as of yet, no one has the answer.
Why?
Because WE ARE THE ANSWER.
:iconaraphete-rising:
I also see someone having his hopes and dreams (as ever) smashed up against reality, and, although still uncertain of himself and hoping (what if?), that pain is making him question things. Thus the social commentary "Invade it leave it/ Leave it less than whole" (this could also represent him "probing" his own will, and, when he takes a step back, fearing the unknown, he leaves himself less than whole). In any case, the uncertainty still seemss to win out, as, even ase takes a step forward, he has to look back, always conditional, and "make sure its fresh [this time]". I truly don't know. There's likely much more going on here than I can pick up right now (it is almost 10 pm) and I'll let you surprise me. Keep up the great work! :)

--
What is our purpose? Why are we here?
These questions have been asked throughout time,
And as of yet, no one has the answer.
Why?
Because WE ARE THE ANSWER.
:iconnikip:
What a brilliant and in depth reading. If i were a little more trained in the soft science of psychology would tell you many interesting things about yourself now. ;) Thank you for taking the time.

Now, in mind there are many interweaving themes. Perhaps most primarily is the concept of the 'conditional' as a destructive force.

Just as Badrilard wrote of the Ethnologist that catalouge's and interprets a race of people within his own system of referents and simulacrum he bids to unwittingly destroy them, I explore our compulsion for conditional concepts. Through the conditional, the ability to speculate the future of the very condition of events transpiring in a certain way, we bid to destroy other interpretations of the future. in fact more over we bid to destroy the future, we explain it through terms we understand in the present in a bid to bridge the gap of otherness. We consume these futures, 'If i pass then', 'If I write this then this could happen', like sushi.

The fish gives me consumtion,the star scale.

Both are left somehow changed and limited by the two voices representing humanity in a workman like fashion. One the instructor the other the student. Another allusion to how we are taught, perhaps as an evolutionary trait, to rely on the conditional process.

That is quite alot, probably not nearly enough but it is 3am here.

How's school?

--
Laughter is the language of the soul[link]

i am also a member of [link]
and [link] and [link]
:iconaraphete-rising:
Again, that piece(and your explanation) both intrigues and baffles me. We'll have to get together sometime and hash all of this out. I'd definitely like to learn more about Badrilard and the other themes you've worked into this. Can you tell that I deeply admire your mind? I haven't met with the kind of challenge you pose me in a long while, and for once, I feel that that this sharp, confident intellect is truly valuable, and, unlike the one I met before, you are very well tempered by kindness and compassion (without compromising too much, of course).

I completely agree with your assessment of the Conditional as a destructive and essential force within humanity, and the way this constant labeling and judging influences everything we do and especially how we learn (though its no more than the old cliche, "the blind leadign the blind"). I'm guessing now that you used sushi and its raw nature to show that in destroying the future with conditions, we consume not only our own potential, but also the very fabric of reality, flayed, chopped, and helpless as it already is. This can also be applied to the people we meet and interact with, our family, our friends, our society, EVERYTHING. One question (or two, as it stands): What happens when we step beyond the conditional? What happens when we stand firmly in the present, without that labeling, that damnable judgment? What happens when we speak with the fish before flaying him, before chopping, sniffing, slicing? "If you catch the speaking salmon in your shrimp-net, cast him back" (from Jacquline Carey's Kushiel's Dart).

I wonder. :)

School's going well enough--I have three exams next week, and then I'm out of University for the summer. Also, beware: I'll be out learning to drive as well. I've already asked Hyougen to light a candle to whatever god/goddess watches over the student driver for me, and I hope you'll do the same (if only in your own way, of course). I'll definitely be writing more this summer, and I hope too that you'll be on the lookout for improvements and additions to Sacrifice Incarnate.

All else aside, I like this piece very, very much.

--
What is our purpose? Why are we here?
These questions have been asked throughout time,
And as of yet, no one has the answer.
Why?
Because WE ARE THE ANSWER.
:iconnikip:
You, my love, will give a fella a swell head. Thank you for the lavish praise.

You have scared me with that question: what happens when we stand firmly in the present?

That is both exhilirating and scary. Thank you for the exploration this so sorely needed. We should get together I'm sure we could put the world to rights.

--
Laughter is the language of the soul[link]

i am also a member of [link]
and [link] and [link]

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