Not all of it stayed, sigh.

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This might well be the best thing I have seen on DA so far.

It is delicately posied without the self indulgent emotion of so many other works.

Theme sets me all a quiver. I hope to see what the intended typography must be like.

I will be preparing a proper critique, but for now kudos.

Isn't the ultimate couplet based on Satre?

That is a great spot, yes Satre.

Please tell me you meant poised and not posied.

I look forward to your in depth critique.

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This was well...ambiguous. Nevertheless, I faved this because I think the typography kind of blew it apart...since your writing is good without question. But see, it's really difficult to read/comprehend, and I know it probably isn't fair that dA's submission stuff needs html tags (god knows i suck at that), but seriously, I'd consider removing the formatting. It's better to be coherent rather than just plain incomprehensible. Again, I did like your writing, you undoubtedly have a lot of talent...but frankly speaking, I got the sense of the piece but if I read it aloud, the words put together no meaning whatsoever. They're too jumbled up.

The typography hasn't quite come out as planned; I can only ever get to gris with industry standard xml now; can't even fathom this html gig.
However the more I look at it, the more I enjoy the difficult and fragmentary scansion and/or thematic qualities.

I mean lord knows I won't begrudge you the desire for linear comprehension. That is and forever will be your luxury as reader. I am incandescantly grateful for your imput and above all for your consideration.

However this said; I am not (currently engaged) in search of truth, universal or otherwise. So the formatting will respectfully stay as it lays.

Thank you again for your consideration

Nik.

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That's fine by me, it's your right as the writer!

You have been helpful, even to the dgeree that you inspired a new work.

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Noce poem, its good and inspiering in a way.